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Bard
04-09-2009, 07:26 PM
Time wraps itself
Around another day
As I steady my course
Set by another

Yonder I peer
Next corner blind
Each juncture a new pathway
Out of blackness comes the jeer.

Old dog in one hand
Walking stick in the other
Full moon our candlite
To guide us till noon.

Glee left in yesteryears
Friends as well
Yet onward we march
Toward the stars set to tell

Minute churns to hours
inches into miles
one foot in front of the other
we face the next mile

Then suddenly I look
upon the old dogs smile........

ravenblanc
04-11-2009, 04:11 PM
For me,the mood is one of questioning reflection and determination...simple in style and word and yet giving a fleeting glimpse of a myriad of emotions.

Then suddenly I look
upon the old dogs smile........

nice
critters are honest

Bard
04-12-2009, 04:02 PM
Raven,

Thank you for noticing,

It is not good work, yet honest perhaps.

there is a dawn where the mantle of inspiration encloaks one
and words a wonder appear, that is when good stuff is penned

these days were a long time ago for me,
What I write now, I barely have enough respect for it to publish it.

As I struggled with this piece, I only published it because it appeared, I wrote it, worth however, quality, mediocre at best.

I feel dishonest when I erase words, i felt needed penned
as was this instance and case.

I had a couple years, 'years ago', when i penned some fine works.

Oh, I go on like an old lady :happy

Thank you for your time taken to comment and read.

Bard
04-12-2009, 08:58 PM
For me,the mood is one of questioning reflection and determination...simple in style and word and yet giving a fleeting glimpse of a myriad of emotions.



nice
critters are honest

Yes, critters are.
Few give them enough respect in observation to even take note
of the above scribed notion and stance.

Bard
08-31-2009, 08:33 PM
Be it known I reread the piece and found it OK.
Not awardwinning but OK.
Miss-spell on candlelight however.
Perhaps having more depth than appears at first


I think Raven said it best.



ravenblanc

For me,the mood is one of questioning reflection and determination...simple in style and word and yet giving a fleeting glimpse of a myriad of emotions.

StrayStar
09-02-2009, 08:33 AM
Be it known I reread the piece and found it OK.
Not awardwinning but OK.



It ain't bad, not bad at all.

:thumbsup

Bard
09-04-2009, 05:32 PM
It ain't bad, not bad at all.

:thumbsup

Thanks man for taking the time to wander around the poetry pavillion
And a special thanks for giving this work a glance, and kind/positive words & input

It was an unexpected pleasure:tiphat

3Parrots
09-11-2009, 12:45 PM
Bard, I like it very much...very much.

ravenblanc
09-27-2009, 07:33 AM
Be it known I reread the piece and found it OK.
Not awardwinning but OK.
Miss-spell on candlelight however.
Perhaps having more depth than appears at first


I think Raven said it best.

I reread it as well and I haven't changed my mind.Glad that we are in agreement,finally.