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ravenblanc
03-24-2007, 09:38 PM
Blinded deer in the headlights' glow
road winding narrow,no where to go.
Like burgundy wine on dirty used snow.
warm blood freezes,no where to flow.
Truck was too fast,death too damn slow.
shuddering breath,final merciful blow.

Bard
03-24-2007, 09:53 PM
Nice flow and rythym

Nice tribute

You saw, you nodded, you cried

You penned the departure in recognition and tribute.

She was not alone, you were there holding her hand in spirit.

Very very sad story

Good title

Im glad you wrote it out

ravenblanc
03-24-2007, 10:03 PM
Thanks,Bard.Your kind words made a bad night a bit better. :flowers