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ravenblanc
04-19-2007, 08:51 PM
Far western shore
strange dark place
no dawn embrace.

endless movement
so silent
straining to hear

just one footfall
grey stone beach
no single sound

no crashing surf
shifting shore
gull cry,only...

shell's sweet whisper
soft breath of
yesterday's hope.

fling it aside
and smash it
mock me no more.

black western sea
on and on
never dawning.

so much nothing
unending,
ever...nothing.

Bard
04-21-2007, 10:46 PM
shell's sweet whisper
soft breath of
yesterday's hope.

My biggest bitch all my life about love epics and other films...

Is that there aren't enough happy endings

damn't if I haven't noticed the same in life

nice piece, sorry my comments appear abstract.

You have a pretty pen often bowing in eloquence..

ravenblanc
04-22-2007, 10:10 AM
My biggest bitch all my life about love epics and other films...

Is that there aren't enough happy endings

damn't if I haven't noticed the same in life

nice piece, sorry my comments appear abstract.

You have a pretty pen often bowing in eloquence..


I always appreciate your time and comments,Bard.
Thanks.

No apologies needed for appearing abstract.Abstract causes me to think in more depth with a hope of gaining better understanding.

And my thought is that,while endings can be profound in their impact,they are limited in number and their effect short lived in comparison with the stories.

The number of possible stories are infinite and will be remembered long after the impact of the ending has faded. So,for me,the stories become more important than the ending.

And if you follow it down the line..no matter what the ending 'written' the real ending remains the same..we all die sometime,which in the case of love stories will most times leave someone unhappy. In most cases it is not our ending that leaves the mark but our story.

I wrote this piece to try and capture the emotions of an 'ending'. But I have kept it to remind me that I can indeed feel this awful and yet survive to continue my 'story'.

That,for me at least,that makes a happy ending to this poem.

And that's where your 'abstract' took me.Thank you.
:happy