View Full Version : How I see you

02-01-2008, 02:52 PM
You were my light for such a long time
shining the way forward through the black cold abyss
a sweet dream that gave hope for the future
that love did exist would exist would fill the emptiness within
vacant ruins left behind from a lifetime of loss
You were also the dagger of steel that ripped me in two
that shredded my heart leaving me in a pile of pain
slumped on my knees drowned in my sorrow
completely void of warmth your shadow blocking the sun
you are the epitome of duality
a mirror of the split within myself
a reminder the wolf that lives is the one I feed
the day will come when I can leave you hungry
be my own light with no conflict
not searching without for something within
I feel it creeping in with the horizon just over the next hill
I am longing for the brightness the warmth
I will get there on my own as I have been all along
you will stay just a dream
a sweet dream that gave me hope when I needed it most.

02-01-2008, 03:39 PM
Much escapes my eye here.

Yet I'm glad this piece did not.

Some lines that staggered me

Well done.

I was originally going to say impressed

Yet, i find it such an overused word.


02-02-2008, 08:00 AM
I surprised myself with this one Rod.
staggered myself -
poignant is the word that comes to mind.
yay me, I survived and remained positive seeing good in the world.
well done indeed.
funny the twists and turns life throws at you. I sure didn't see myself here this time last year.
not even a few months ago.
but oddly enough I am finding myself quite content where I am.
there is luck in love after all.